Not so funny games (171 words)

By Neel Anil Panicker

Little Ricky smelled an opportunity.

He watched his mom as she stepped out clutching her shopping bag,  waited for her to turn around at the gate, and utter her standard warning, “Weather’s very bad. Stay inside, okey”.

He nodded his head; knew she would not be home for an hour.

That’s how it had been for the past two weeks ever since Dad had to ‘urgently leave town for office work’.

He waited for the sound of her footsteps as it hit the asphalt road leading out to the main road to recede and fade away; then tiptoed out.

In no time he had sprinted past the apartment blocks, jumping over the fence to reach the edges of the swampy grounds.

He was looking for frogs. ‘We catch them there,’ his friends boasted.

Ricky bent down near a puddle of dirty water and dipped his hand.

He felt something and yanked his hand out.

His little fingers held a Titan watch, its glass smashed.

It was his father’s. He ran out screaming.



100th Challenge

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Week of 01-31 through 02-06-2017

FFfAW Challenge-Week of January 31, 2017


20 thoughts on “neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/175ds/FFfAW/31/01/2017

  1. Goodness Neel that was an unexpected ending, well done you drew me into your story very well…

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    1. Hi Michael, that was very nice of you to say. I am glad you were drawn into the story. Thanks again.

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    2. Thanks Michael, that’s what i am hearing a lot about this story. I am glad you thought so. Thanks again.

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  2. An interesting take. Hope you follow it up.

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    1. Thanks Yarnspinner. I do indeed intend to do that.

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  3. hahahaha well, his mum will not be happy about that,


    1. Yes indeed, becoz she’s got a lot to answer for. Thanks Joyfrida for your appreciation.

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  4. Thanks a lot Yarnspinner. I do intend to follow this up. Have a wonderful day.


  5. Great twist at the end, completely unexpected. What a discovery – did the mother have something to do with it I wonder? Well done.

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    1. Thanks Kelly, your guess is as good as mine. I am glad you liked my story.

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  6. Oh no! His dad has been killed! Such a sad ending Neel! Wonderful story!

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    1. Yes, sad indeed. I am so glad you liked my story, PJ.


      1. I really liked your story! 🙂


  7. michael1148humphris

    Such a shock, I did not expect that, well done,

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    1. Terribly shocking. I am glad you liked my story, Michael.


  8. That took a horrible twist at the end.


    1. Yes, it was horrible. Alas! the perils of good fiction. But then fiction is nothing but a reflection of life’s harsh truths. Thanks James.


  9. Nooooo, you can’t finish on a cliffhanger!! lol


    1. Yes, I can, lol. Thanks for your appreciation.


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