neelwrites/shortstory/ff/100words/17/03/21

PHOTO PROMPT © Liz Young

Blind Love

By Neel Anil Panicker

Shilpi made a cardinal error; she fell in love.

No don’t mistake me.
The error wasn’t in her falling in love.
The error lay in her falling in love with the stems and branches.

Confused? Beguiled?

What did I just say, did I hear you ask?

Also, could you for God’s sake speak less in metaphors…
use everyday language.

Yeah, I shall.

So here it is.

What our dear college mate, the ever magnaninous, ever effervescent Shilpi did was give her heart—lock  stock and barrel to a man, a married man whose roots lay elsewhere.

Now, how’s that for clarity!

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13 thoughts on “neelwrites/shortstory/ff/100words/17/03/21

  1. Nice use of the promt

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  2. A fine untangling of the story 🙂

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  3. Excellent metaphor and I like how you explicated it.

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  4. Good one! Love the word-play in this one.

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  5. Dear Neel,

    Really good use of the prompt. Shilpi let her heart lead instead of her college educated brain, didn’t she?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. Novel use of the prompt. Well done

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  7. Perfect clarity, Neel. Sad story.

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  8. Now I understand! A really original take Neel.

    My story!

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  9. Good deal. Not her mistake, but the story. Always love your voice.

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  10. Ah! Deceptive love weaves a tangle of untruths like the roots of the wise old Banyan tree, indeed.

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  11. Bam, that final line! Well done! 😀

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