neelwrites/flash/fiction/shortstory/FF/100words/31/10/2019

PHOTO PROMPT © Fatima Fakier Deria

CLEANED OUT 

By Neel Anil Panicker 

“Damn’t! How could they ever know?,” hissed Vinay.

Standing beside, Inder nodded his head.

His eyes took in the half opened leather case, the disarrayed curtains, the empty glass that sat atop an empty bowl on an emptied out central table.

“It looks like the safe house was not so safe, boss,” he proffered.

Turning around, Vinay smashed the pistol butt onto his sidekick’s face.

Blood began to trickle down his pockmarked cheeks.

“Asshole! I’ve just lost two million dollars and you’re rubbing it with your stupid word puns”.

“Sorry boss”.

“Don’t sorry me. Go find out who’s done this”.

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Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers. Other stories featuring the prompt can be found here.

 

 

 

12 thoughts on “neelwrites/flash/fiction/shortstory/FF/100words/31/10/2019

  1. So that’s what was in the tupperware tubs!

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  2. Dear Neel,

    I’m honestly confused as to what’s happening here. And this “His eyes too in the half opened leather case, ” makes no sense. Did his eyes fall out and into the half opened leather case? The boss isn’t a nice guy, is he?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Sorry Rochelle, that’s a typo. Please read it as “His eyes took in the half opened leather case”…

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  3. Good tension and underlying violence here, Neel.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  4. I felt a bit sorry for the sidekick! It wasn’t his fault…

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  5. Sounds like a vicious character. Very tense scene, well-described.

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  6. Abhijit Ray

    Vinay has a violent temper and Inder does not know what to say nd when. It is time they traced the money, before somone gets seriously hurt.

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  7. He’s not to be messed with! Terrific little tale Neel.

    Here’s my contribution!

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  8. A ruthless character! Feel sorry for Inder. A different take on the prompt.

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  9. Inder need to look for a new job—far, far away from Mr. Grumpy Pants 🙂

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