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By Neel Anil Panicker

“Hey, do I know you from St. Xavier’s?”

Derek looked up to find a man, late fortyish, his age, smiling quizzically at him.

‘The bastard, he had got him.’

Despite the wig, the false gait, the gold teeth, multi-hued glasses, Panama hat notwithstanding, school buddies still get you.

“I’m sorry. You’are mistaken. I am Karl Andrews.”

The man stopped, stared, glared, then mumbled, fumbled, then stumbled away.

Derek watched his receding back; heaved a sigh of relief.

His fingers cradled his Samsonite suitcase.

Inside, the diamonds remained huddled to a corner.

Now, all he’d  to do was get past security.

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24 thoughts on “neelwrites/flash/fiction/FF/100words/19/06/2019

  1. Hmm not a chance. I’ve watched a reality tv show “Border Security”. Busted! 😀

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  2. He may be over-disguised. To professionals, he’ll stand out as a man trying to conceal himself

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    1. Maybe, he isn’t one. Or, maybe he is one who knows exactly what he is doing.


  3. It’s not an auspicious start for him. Hopefully his luck or plausibility will improve.

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  4. I’m sure the school chum was mumbling, “Right, Derek, be that way. Jerk.” as he walked away… I think Derek is going to get busted….

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  5. Living dangerously, Derek. One of these days, you’re going to get caught!

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  6. Dear Neel,

    I loved “mumbled, fumbled and stumbled…” Perhaps Derek needs a better disguise. Something not quite so obvious. 😉 Nicely done.




  7. It’s always the people that know you who can trip you up. Good thing his old mate wasn’t working security. 🙂

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    1. True. That way the story would have ended even before it had begun.


  8. I like your story, Neel. You have both a crime thriller and an anecdote about how schoolfriends always recognise you. That’s an ambitious attempt in 100 word flash fiction, and you succeed. I particularly enjoyed “The man stopped, stared, glared, then mumbled, fumbled, then stumbled away.” You showed delight in the word sounds, and that’s an endearing character trait.

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    1. I am indeed thankful Penny for such an insightful feedback. You made my day.

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  9. He’s certainly on edge! One hurdle jumped another to go.

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    1. Life’s all about hurdles, isn’t it, and about clearing them. Thanks Keith

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  10. Well, all things aside, I must agree–Boarding School pals will pick you out of a crowd, no matter what! 🙂

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  11. Hoping he makes it through.


  12. The disguise is not helping him much!

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  13. Methinks he is trying too hard!
    I don’t have much faith he shall succeed!

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  14. Abhijit Ray

    Derek is smuggling diamonds. Good for him. His disguise also appears to be perfect. I hope he is not caught by the x-ray machine at the security gate.

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  15. A good and well-written story, Neel. I last traveled with the “take your shoes off” requirement. It’s become even stricter now. He hasn’t got a chance with today’s security. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  16. Think he’ll get caught soon. Great read.

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  17. gahlearner

    That was funny and delightful. The poor chap doesn’t have a chance, but maybe, when in jail, he can pick up a trick or two from the pros.


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