PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
WRITTEN FOR FRIDAY FICTIONEERS BY ROCHELLEWISOFF
COMEUPPANCE
By Neel Anil Panicker
The policeman’s eyes turned towards the body, that lay covered in white sheet in the main hall.
Around it encircled a crowd of grieving relatives.
Barely an hour after the lifeless form had been pulled out from the in house swimming pool.
‘Sir, another thing___his last wish was not to have a postmortem. You know how he was…’
The cop nodded his head.
Whoever disobeyed a deadman’s wishes, especially one who was a stickler for rules.
Also, the city’s Mayor.
Later that night, Alice looking into her mother’s photo, whispered, “I ensured father drowned just as he’d ensured you drowned”.
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Payback! in spades. Good one.
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Thanks Sandra
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Ooh! Sinister!
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Revenge is a dish best served soggy, I guess. 🙂 Nice twist ending.
David
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Yes, very much. Thanks a lot, David
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Yeah! Thanks Hardy
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A daughter’s revenge. Nice one.
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What goes around comes around. Looks like he got what he deserved.
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How convenient… no post mortem and payback taken care of…
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Some strile gold, even after, especially after a crime
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Bang. It could be part 2 of my story.
You gave so much detail with so little. Strong beginning, middle and end (hard to achieve with 100 word limit).
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Thanks Tannille, and i read yours. I had written mine without reading anyone’s. Yes, i agree i just took of where you left.
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Themes do tend to spread through the group. Many of us saw a body. Each week I find the similarities between stories fascinating, maybe more than the differences.
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Chilling twist ending. Well done – I wasn’t expecting that!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Hopefully, Alice can now move on. Nice one.
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Nice story. So many twists. Police man should have ordered post mortem, irrespective of the unusual wish of the deceased. But that is how the system works.
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Dear Neel,
What goes around comes around…or in this case, “laps around.” 😉 Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Wow. Talk about dysfunctional! I truly hope it ends there.
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A little revenge story to start the weekend off right. Great story!
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Thanks a lot Jewel. Much appreciated.
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It’s a good thing his last wish was not to have a post-mortem. He paved the way for his daughter’s revenge. Well done!
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In a back handed way, yes. Thanks Brenda
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Alice, avenger supreme! Great story this week, Neel.
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Thanks a lot, Bears
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I think she’ll get away with this. The ending was unexpected and gave a more sinister feeling to the whole story.
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A good and well-written story, Neel. His own words left his death a mystery to all but his daughter who got her revenge. —- Suzanne
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Thanks a lot Pat
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Dark! Extremely well done. I see you haven’t been writing lately, or have you moved to another blog? Thanks for visiting my blog. Why don’t you join the WEP challenge? You still have time,
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Hi, I am glad you replied that you loled my story. I guess your response was to a very old story that I wrote way back in 2019. I write almost every single day. My website is : neelwrites. It’s on wordpress. I read your story. Very poignant. I happened to stumble on this website WEP. If there is time, I intend to write for this month on the prompt SCREAM. Have a nice day, Kalpana
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