Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here
THE AMRUTA/PRANAY LOVE STORY
PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson
By Neel Anil Panicker (GENRE/REALISTIC FICTION)
Amruta cups her soft fingers around the wooden handle and watches as a sea of kaleidoscopic panels make concentric circles above her head.
Her gaze then falls at the umbrella rim from which cascade puffed droplets of wind-washed waters that make a splash on the rain splattered grounds below.
Her heart goes pitter patter.
Beside her, Pranay watches her watch the unfolding of Nature’s pristine glory.
His palms lock hers as waves of spasmodic delight run through the spines of the two lovers.
From a distance, and from under another umbrella, a man watches them, then spits on the earth.
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Great sounds of falling water
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A lovely romantic scene in the rain, until the last killer line – all is not well. Nicely done Neel.
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the last line is the killer.. well written neel
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Dear Neel,
What a contrast between the young lovers and the other man. In one sentence you’ve told us what we need to know. Well done…almost poetry.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks a lot, dear Rochelle.
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It was all going so well until… Nice one Neel
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I enjoyed reading this Neel. But the fourth word form the end, did you mean [spits]
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Oh! Whoever that man is, he’s up to no good. Spitting on the ground isn’t a happy thing at all. For some cultures, it’s a curse.
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Poetic, quite lyrical – then the spit comes and shocks and changes the whole feel of the story. Well done.
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