This week’s photo prompt is provided by Yinglan. Thank you Yinglan!

By Neel Anil Panicker

Time you got married, Afreen? You know Imtiaz, Afroz’s cousin. He’s just landed a fat paying bank job, is kind, well educated, and good looking too__ideal husband material. What do you say?

Lisa tossed her hair aside and stretched her legs forward. Squinting her eyes to shield herself from the afternoon rays, she looked at the woman seated beside her and wondered, ‘The only ideal husband material for her if ever there was one is Afroz, your husband, the one who ticks on all the right boxes, the one whom you ensnared, and also now the one I got to get back’.

She turned around and looked over; little Salim was playing at a distance, his head bent, examining a small mound of earth.

Shortly, if she played her cards well, the kid would have a new ‘mother.’

The thought made her aware of her task. Slowly, she raised her left arm over her shoulder.

Fifty feet afar, from behind the bushes, the hired killer noted the movement through his telescopic lens, and pressed the trigger.

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FFfAW Challenge-Week of March 20, 2018

15 thoughts on “neelwrites/murderonhermind/flashfictionfortheaspiringwriter/shortstory/fiction/176words/20/03/2018

  1. Woah! I was taken aback by the end.

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  2. I didn’t see that one coming. Nicely done Neel

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  3. I didn’t see the hired killer coming but I thought she was up to no good.

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  4. Oh dear Neel, but that was all so fatal.

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  5. michael1148humphris

    Neil I really enjoyed this story and the way you built the characters.

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  6. Plausible explanation for the prompt. Innovative take.


  7. I’ve learned to expect sinister doings in some of your stories. She’s quite the predator and I feel sorry she’s going to be “mothering” anyone.


  8. Whoa! Looks like she’ll do anything to get her man. A very intense story, Neel!


  9. Wow! Very chilling, Neel. Great story!


  10. Ha ha ha, don’t you just love a woman who knows what she wants, and exactly how to get it 🙂


  11. How sinister. And how sad that she didn’t even thing about the trauma to the child.

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