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THE TRAP
PHOTO PROMPT © Victor and Sarah Potter
By Neel Anil Panicker
The hours ebbed by and so did her life.
Lathered in her own blood and bile, Shrishti lay on the floor, a sorry near comatose figure.
On the third day, she stirred. And when the bones of her frail body rattled like an ancient coal engine bogey gone careening off the rails, she cried her lungs out in pain, a heart wrenching wail that birthed and died within the four walls.
It was then that she eyed the spider’s web, and her ears were once again assaulted by his words: ‘Remember baby, there’s no escape. You’re mine and mine alone.’
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Oh, my God!
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thats tragic
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Yes, indeed.
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Unfortunately, this could very well be the truth of so many women’s lives across the world.
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Very true Anurag. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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A disturbing tale.
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I loved the bones rattling like a steam train bogey
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Thanks Neil
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The trap is real for so many women. That’s a very tragic tale, written beautifully.
I admire that you are writing about issues facing women, especially in our part of the globe.
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Thanks a lot, Moon. I like to write on issues that are close to my heart and/or disturb me a lot.
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Such a graphic tale of suffering.
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Thanks Sandra.
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I agree with what Moon said. It shows great sensitivity and humanity.
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Thanks a lot, Jane.
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🙂
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You have told a tale of every woman’s worst nightmare, Neel. Your story made me shudder, which shows how well written it is. An excellent choice of words to paint a stark setting and convey the victim’s sense of physical and emotional pain within her hopeless situation.
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I am speechless. Coming from you i take it as a huge compliment. Thanks a lot, Sarah.
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Brilliant job of bringing us in to feel her pain. So descriptive and awful (in a good writing way)
And way too true for way too many…
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Very true. A lot of women undergo such pain or even more.
Thanks a lot, Dale.
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Sounds like she made some bad choices.
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Yes
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Sad and visceral.
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True
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Terrifying
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Very disturbing
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Dear Neel,
The feeling of entrapment and helplessness are tangible. I could feel her pain. Well done…very well done, indeed.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks a lot. Yours words mean a lot to me, Rochelle
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Great description Neel. You could feel and hear this piece. Horrible position to be in – trapped.
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Creatively described.
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Devastating… predators on women are many
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Oh dear. I’m going to bed soon, with that picture in my head. What an excellent description you wrote!
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ugh – hope she gets help (and nice fiction, N)
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I was left with one word, Neel, WOW …. a very shocking story.
Isadora 😎
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Great description, Neel. I hate it when someone dies slowly and no one checks on them. People are so solitary these days. Others think they’re interfering and no one checks. I especially hate it when children are involved. Good writing, Neel. —- Suzanne
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