neelwrites/warroom/FFfAW/flashfiction/175words/09/01/20118

FFfAW Challenge-Week of January 9, 2018

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WAR ROOM

By Neel Anil Panicker

“You are making a huge mistake, Chella”.

The 47-year-old leader of Peoples’ War Group stared at his childhood friend Jagdamba Mahto.

The two were holed up in a cave deep inside the Bhadraharsotwa Jungles.

Not many in the extreme left wing party he had founded barely a decade ago had the authority to address him by his first name.

To everyone he was Commander in Chief, a name that struck fear and kept the police forces of five States on tenterhooks.

‘Look what’s happened, Chella. Your dictatorial style’s led to the creation of three more splinter groups. We’ve made enemies. We’ve…’

“Come to the point”.

Even the mild mannered Mahto knew when to tread carefully.

‘Chella, all of us want to overthrow the corrupt government of Karimpala and establish Peoples’ Government. Let your ego not play spoilsport. I suggest a truce. Bring them all under one roof, give them some power, buy their loyalty, my friend.’

Silence followed. After a while Chella spoke, his voice, a soft whisper, “You’re right. Been always right, my friend.’

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17 thoughts on “neelwrites/warroom/FFfAW/flashfiction/175words/09/01/20118

  1. For some reason I thought he was going to get shot.

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  2. nice take on the social layers and politics – and favorite line: Let your ego not play spoilsport.

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  3. Contemporary politics fictionalized. Great take.

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  4. What a pity more leaders didn’t listen and admit someone else is right (or at least see another point of view.) The world would be a better, more peaceful place if you were writing history Neel. Good one.

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  5. Good that such a tough man has such a wise lieutenant and that he’s prepared to listen to him! Nice writing Neel

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      1. My total pleasure Neel

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  6. I’m not sure he will take heed, despite his acceptance here – it seems power will corrupt him at some stage no matter what.

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  7. Chela doesn’t seem to be such a bad guy after all! Great story!

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  8. michael1148humphris

    This was rather an interesting conversation, which left me interested to read more.

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  9. “Bring them all under one roof, give them some power, buy their loyalty, my friend.’” Loved teh thought of BOUGHT loyalty. Great premise… often does not turn out as expected. There is often a bigger purse somewhere. ENJOYED!! Nice job with the political layers!

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    1. Yes this is a world with multiple layers. Deceit and betrayal are just round the corner.

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  10. So true unfortunately. All ‘people’s struggles’ start off with noble intentions, and then lose their way because of the lust for power and clash of egos.

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