neelwrites/ruminations/FFaFW/fiction/shortstory/flash/158words/21/11/2017

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RUMINATIONS

Thank you Footy and Foodie for our photo prompt this week!

By Neel Anil Panicker

Sunrise or sunset__she never could make out which she liked more.

Guess, everything depended on her mood.

The early dawn slow heating up of the shell-splattered sea sands as she sat around the rocky edges, her hands gently getting warmer with the touch of foam washed waters filled her heart with a glow that stayed with her all through the day. Dawns dawned new meanings into her life and filled up all empty crevices of her heart with love and happiness.

Come evenings she watched with resigned anticipation at the ever darkening silhouette of the setting sun as it bid goodbye to earthly pleasures hiding behind the distant mountains edges.

The slow metamorphosis of the dawn’s mesmerizing golden orb into a darkish charcoal singed her heart, dousing all nascent desires of the day.

She loved them both, equally and evenly.

Of late, the setting sun the more, especially so after Alfred’s murder, a death she had waited for long.

©nelanipanicker2017 #fiction #FFfAW #shortstory #158words

13 thoughts on “neelwrites/ruminations/FFaFW/fiction/shortstory/flash/158words/21/11/2017

  1. That sure is a surprise twist at the end! Your story was so peaceful until the end. Great story Neel!

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    1. I wanted that surprise twist at the end to work and am glad you liked it, PJ.
      Thanks a lot, PJ.

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  2. One keeps fantasizing about liberation, and then one day, it happens … out of the blue.

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    1. What is man without a bit of fantasy thrown in. Thanks a lot, Reena.

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  3. Moon

    Fascinating fusion of two personalities in one.
    A great twist at the end.

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  4. A twist out of nowhere to break the peaceful spell. Nicely done.

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  5. I knew there’d be a “kicker” at the end.

    As far as sunrises and sunsets go, mentally, I’m in a very different place in early morning than in the evening. I guess in my case, I prefer sunrises.

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    1. Same here but then as in life our preferences take a back seat, don’t they. Thanks for the appreciation, James,

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  6. What a fascinating twist! If there’s a moral to the story, it must surely be that even the wicked can appreciate beauty, and respond deeply to the natural world. Which is quite a good lesson to ponder.

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  7. neel – very beautiful and fav part:
    filled up all empty crevices of her heart
    ahhhh

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