FRIDAY FICTIONEERS HOSTED BY THE WONDERFUL ROCHELLE
THE DISCOVERY
PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson
By Neel Anil Panicker
As the siren dripping police car screeched to a halt near the white marbled hotel entrance, the bumble bee of television cameras swooped down on it, catching off guard its lone occupant Inspector Sharma even as he emerged out of his air-conditioned cocoon into the mid-June summer madness that had become Kolkata.
“Not now” he thundered, as he hacked his way past the thick foliage of thick skinned news sniffing journos and their protruding microphones, taking the lift to the tenth floor, to room number 110, where awaiting him were three dismembered bodies including one of a three-month-old baby girl.
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Dear Neel,
You set the scene well. I could hear the sirens and the buzz. Disturbing ending, though. 😦 Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
thank you for your appreciation.
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I loved it…the description was too good 🙂
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Thanks Sree.
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Amazing setting, Neel and very well-written. Very sad ending , though .
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Sad endings are the lot of Inspector Sharma, unfortunately. I am glad you loved the story, Moon.
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Boy, that was descriptive! Awful ending, though (not writing-wise, subject-wise)!
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I know it is a horrible ending but then at times life is so. Thanks Dale for the appreciation.
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True!
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Really a fun read, Neel. Descriptions amazing!
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Thanks a lot.
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You described it so well!👍
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Thanks Shivam
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Chilling. Lovely narration.
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Thanks YS
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oh my what an ending 😦
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Thanks
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I get the impression he’s none too keen on the media.
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Neel, well done. I really love atmospheric and poetic language. Quite a few phrases leaped out at me. Great story.
xx Rowena
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That was such a nice comment. I am so very pleased. Thanks Rowena.
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with all the stress, i wouldn’t be surprised if he’s looking forward to retirement. 🙂
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You wrote that so well. :o)
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Thanks a lot.
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Hi Neel reading crime novels is not my thing, but I loved the words you used in the middle section.
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Thanks Michael
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Inspector Sharma even as he emerged out of his air-conditioned cocoon into the mid-June summer madness that had become Kolkata. This line certainly says a lot! Nice writing.
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Any murder is sad and frightful, and that of a 3 month old baby girl is disturbing. Enjoyed the descriptions, as usual very well written Neel 🙂
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Love the atmosphere.. but despite the heat the end is chilling.
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That is so dark and atmospheric. I don’t know how the police steel themselves to deal with some horrors, especially ones related to child victims. Well written, Neel.
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The police have to deal with such circumstances almost always. Thanks for the appreciation, Sarah.
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You and I were on the same track today.
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Great imagery and beautiful language here.
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You packed so much detail into your 100 words! So well written!
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Well done. You’ve crafted something here that could very much lend itself to a detective story…
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Another case for Sharma – and a truly grim one too! Well written – a true feeling of noise and chaos.
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A few murders turn out to be very grisly. Thanks anyways for the appreciation, Lynn.
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Absolutely. Even i thought about it later after i had written the story. Thanks a lot for the appreciation, Michael.
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Great scene setting and description. Just a minor point, I’d change one of the thick’s, “thick foliage of thick skinned…” twice in four words is irritating but it gives you the opportunity to use something else, which will add to the richness of the piece
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The concept of this is exciting but I wish that you had made more sentences. Personally, I find those long sentences hard to read.
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Your descriptive words proved to be needed for the powerful ending.
A gruesome but realistic story. I liked it, Neel.
Isadora 😎
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Excellent, Neel. I could almost fee the heat as he climbed out of the air-conditioned car. I’ve had heat hit me in the face coming out of air-conditioning. The ending was extremely realistic but not much different than what we read in the papers these days. I hope Inspector Sharma catches the killer. Good writing. —- Suzanne
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Grim and well executed. Crime fiction is your forte.
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