neelwrites/FF/sleepingbeauty/fiction/shortstory/100words/31/05/2017

Posted on by neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS

Many thanks to the wonderful Rochelle for hosting this excellent weekly challenge called FRIDAY FICTIONEERS at

https://rochellewisoff.com/

SLEEPING BEAUTY  

PHOTO PROMPT © Karuna

By Neel Anil Panicker

My slumberous self wakes up in spiteful sweat, stony eyes locking horns with walls that mirror my lonesome existence.

And then it begins, the hallucinations, one of those slow moving Victorian horror shows, reel after torturous reel unspooling in stark black and white.

That’s when I smell and see, the nauseating putrescence, followed by the hellish spectre; a  blackened doll, its grotesque innards; lips, half opened, as if  wanting to say something; eyes, two black buttons staring into space, the face, a question mark.

It’s hers, my little one’s, all of four, put to sleep by a mad man’s bomb.

©neelanilpanciker2017 #FF #fiction #100 words

38 thoughts on “neelwrites/FF/sleepingbeauty/fiction/shortstory/100words/31/05/2017”

  1. neilmacdon
    May 31, 2017 at 9:20 am

    I liked spiteful sweat

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    1. neelwritesblog
      May 31, 2017 at 1:34 pm

      Thanks Neil.

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  2. Reena Saxena
    May 31, 2017 at 9:37 am

    Horrendous!

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  3. shivamt25
    May 31, 2017 at 10:16 am

    A terrific tale!

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    1. neelwritesblog
      May 31, 2017 at 1:34 pm

      Thanks Shivam.

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  4. rochellewisoff
    May 31, 2017 at 11:49 am

    Dear Neel,

    A nightmare that doesn’t leave upon awakening. Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. neelwritesblog
      May 31, 2017 at 1:35 pm

      Nightmarish indeed! Thanks Rochelle.

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  5. jellico84
    May 31, 2017 at 12:38 pm

    Oh, how I hated to like this, Neel. It is soooo sad. Brought tears to my eyes in sympathy. So, totally understand the emotions behind this. Have seen too much violence in my life. Well told.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      May 31, 2017 at 1:37 pm

      I hated too, to write this. But it was brutish tale that needed to be told, if only to expose the diabolic designs of certain evil forces that are threatening to take over and crush peace and love.
      Thank you for the appreciation, Jellico

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  6. Mike
    May 31, 2017 at 1:18 pm

    Their question: WHY. … I would say that they are not mad, but a evil. Being mad rarely equates to being evil.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      May 31, 2017 at 1:39 pm

      Symbiotic_ mad as well as evil. Mike, i believe they are both, only one cannot explain for the extent of the horrors that are being committed every single hour around the globe.

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  7. Lynn Love
    May 31, 2017 at 4:21 pm

    A well-written slice of horror Neel and sadly reflective of our times. Well done

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    1. neelwritesblog
      May 31, 2017 at 5:05 pm

      Yes, it mirrors todays’ terror filled times. Thanks a lot, Lynn.

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      1. Lynn Love
        June 1, 2017 at 6:16 am

        My pleasure 🙂

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  8. James
    May 31, 2017 at 4:50 pm

    Sad and infuriating.

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  9. Iain Kelly
    May 31, 2017 at 6:04 pm

    I couldn’t bring myself to write this one as a terror attack. Well done for going there and well written.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      May 31, 2017 at 6:17 pm

      THANKS Lian. The first thing that struck was a child’s still frame. I know, at times it is difficult to write about such things. Thanks Lian.

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  10. Rosemary Carlson
    May 31, 2017 at 6:38 pm

    This WAS like a nightmare! Great!!

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 4:58 am

      Thanks a lot, Rose

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  11. Jane Dougherty
    May 31, 2017 at 7:04 pm

    This one cuts right to the quick, Neel. You put your finger on the pulse of our times. Absolute horror.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 4:59 am

      Thanks a lot, Jane.

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      1. Jane Dougherty
        June 2, 2017 at 8:13 am

        My pleasure 🙂

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  12. Rowena
    May 31, 2017 at 10:40 pm

    Neel, this prompt was too graphic for me and I struggled with a response. The doll looked too much like a dead baby, but possibly even more gruesome. Dolls can be very unnerving. I thought you crafted a really eerie piece here caught inbetween the horrors of nightmares and reality.
    Unfortunately, these horrors aren’t confined to our times.HUmanity and a terrible track record.
    Hope you’ve had a great week.
    xx Rowena

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 5:02 am

      Yes, sadly reflective of our times. Thanks, Rowena. Hope you have a great week ahead.

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  13. Moon
    June 1, 2017 at 6:13 am

    I can’t imagine the shock and the eternal helpless longing for the beloved . Very well written, Neel.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 5:02 am

      Thanks a lot Moon

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  14. Liz Young
    June 1, 2017 at 11:25 am

    So tragic and well-written, Neel.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 5:03 am

      THANKS LIz

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  15. yarnspinnerr
    June 1, 2017 at 12:54 pm

    Terror and tragedy.
    Great write.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 5:04 am

      Thanks

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  16. Dahlia
    June 2, 2017 at 1:55 am

    Tragic and unfortunately all too true for countless people all over the world

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  17. Michael B. Fishman
    June 2, 2017 at 2:54 pm

    That last sentence . . . :*(

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 5:15 pm

      Thanks

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  18. Sarah Potter Writes
    June 2, 2017 at 3:52 pm

    A nightmare without end. How awful to have such a gruesome dream and then awaken and find no escape from it. You certainly have a way with words, Neel, and have succeeded in painting a most visceral and blood-chilling image.

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 2, 2017 at 5:12 pm

      A nightmare with no end. Thanks a lot for the high praise, Sarah. Coming from you that means a lot. Thanks again.

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  19. plaridel
    June 2, 2017 at 6:32 pm

    if the medium is indeed the message, you have succeeded in this story.

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  20. Dale
    June 2, 2017 at 7:15 pm

    You definitely do have a way with words, Neel. That is a worst parent’s nightmare…

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    1. neelwritesblog
      June 3, 2017 at 5:07 am

      Thanks Dale.

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