neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/FF/99words/30/03/2017

Golden Days (100 words)

PHOTO PROMPT © Fatima Fakier Deria

By Neel Anil Panicker

John adjusted his binoculars. The ship’s hulk came into focus.

His eyes x-rayed the disembarking passengers.

He watched their smiling visages; the rich and the pretending to be so, the young and the not so, all itching to drink and drown in an alien culture.

For them it was ‘Goodbye Andamans, Hello Sunderbans’, the Wild East.

His eyes caught a seventy something pony tailed hippie who lined up at the customs counter.

The man was holding a grey duffel bag with a false bottom.

John moved away from his hotel room window and fixed a drink.

His gold had arrived.

©neelanilpanicker2017 #fiction  #shortstory #FF #100 words

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by the wonderfully talented Rochelle at

https://rochellewisoff.com/

25 thoughts on “neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/FF/99words/30/03/2017

  1. Dear Neil,

    Loved the description of the aging hippie. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Dale

      Wonder why? 😉

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      1. Thank you Captain Obvious. 😉

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    2. Thank you Rochelle. I thought to liven things up by bringing in this character. Glad you liked it.

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    3. Thanks so much, Rochelle

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  2. Dale

    I guess not all passengers are there for the same reason…

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    1. No, it is not as if they are holding a global smugglers’ meet.
      Just one ageing septuagenarian pipe smoking baldie will suffice.

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      1. Dale

        Ha ha ha!!

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  3. gahlearner

    Great description of the crowd, and an unexpected ending. I like this a lot.

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  4. Excellent take Neel. Lovely descriptions and a nice sense of humour. Liked it a lot.

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    1. SO glad you liked it Lain. THANKS a lot.

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  5. not so fast. he must pass customs first. 🙂

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  6. Our love of gold …….
    Very well described.

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  7. the rich and the pretending to be so, the young and the not so ~ great lines!!!

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  8. I didn’t expect John to be in need of smuggled gold. Wonder what he will trade.

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    1. JOHN is experienced enough to cut a good deal for himself.

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  9. Your description was so spot on I think i know that guy!

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  10. I loved the line “the rich and the pretending to be so”. An interesting take on the prompt.

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