TRAPPED   (166 words)

By Neel Anil Panicker

‘For him you’re just a piece of meat…another of his conquests’.

Avantika couldn’t believe her ears.

“How can you say that, Deepti? You’re supposed to be my best friend?”

The remark made Deepti discard the chair and straddle upto the bedside.

‘Yes, best friend for eighteen fucking years. Since the time we were in kindergarten, right?’

As Avantika propped herself against the pillow, Deepti continued, ‘This guy Brajesh…he’s a Lothario…out to impregnate anything that moves in a skirt. Stay away from him, Avi’.

“But I am in love. I can see it in his eyes too, in the way he holds me, says those magical words, in the way he…”

‘Fucks you. Isn’t that what it is? The way he gently lowers you onto bed and takes off your clothes while allowing you to gorge on his rippling torso, run your hands around that black mole around his lower left thigh, play around…’

“Wait, how do you know about his thigh mole?”

‘The hunter had trapped me too’.

©neelanilpanicker2017  # fiction #short story  # FFfAW

Written for

FFfAW Challenge-Week of February 28, 2017

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104th Challenge

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Week of 02-28 through 03-06-2017

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12 thoughts on “neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/FFfAW/28/02/2017

  1. michael1148humphris

    O the slip of the tongue, and a story that was well crafted and full of imagery. Well done.

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  2. Sounds to me she needs to listen to her friend! Great story, Neel!

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    1. Yes, that’s what friends are for. Thanks PJ for the appreciation.

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  3. Did not see that last bit coming. Well done, Neel.

    Liked by 1 person

  4. 😮 Friends advice is worth having. Great Story Neel. KL ❤

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    1. So true, KL. Thanks for the comments.

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  5. What a revelation, expertly done Neel.

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  6. mandibelle16

    I thought the friend was just being jealous but it turns out she was seduced by her friends boyfriend. I wonder when the friend slept with this guy? He could still be a bad guy but then he might not. He could very much like the girl he’s seeing.


  7. Quite a twist and a revelation. Hmm! She better beware.


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