neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/150words/FFfAW/17/01/2017

SON RISES; SUN SETS

By Neel Anil Panicker                 word count: 137

“The old order changeth giving way to the new”

‘Changeth? What fancy language! Tell me in words I understand”.

“That’s the problem: You just don’t understand, dear father. I said it is time for you to give way”.

“Oh! Is it? And what do I do? Simply sit, pasture, decay, die?”

“Oh! Please. Enough of your emotional nonsense. I am putting it straight: get off or I will throw you out”.

The words knifed through the aging patriarch’s chest. He felt his heart vessels constrict.

He finally saw the writing on the wall. His head bowed in submission.

The son smiled, strode upto the father, sought his blessings, and left.

Later, from his balcony, he watched his son cycle away. It was the very same on which he had first learnt to ride; the tutor__his own father.

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FFfAW Challenge-Week of January 17, 2017

WELCOME !

98th Challenge

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Week of 01-17 through 01-23-2017

Written in response  to flash fiction challenge hosted by https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2017/01/16/fffaw-challenge-week-of-january-17-2017/

 

7 thoughts on “neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/150words/FFfAW/17/01/2017

  1. Very sad how he is treating his father. It left me wondering if the father had treated his father the same way. Wonderful story, Neel!

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    1. You reap what you sow. Thanks for your appreciation, PJ.

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  2. Nice one Neel, a few pf us having the same idea of equating the fallen tree to an aging father, but with different takes on it.

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    1. Yes, great minds think alike, isn’t it? I read yours and a few others on the same lines though with different takes. Thanks for your appreciation, Lain.

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  3. This was a grim story, reflective of modern life for some. I believe that the love of an elderly father should be cherished not destroyed,

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    1. Yes, indeed. But what happens when there is no love?

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  4. mandibelle16

    I felt sad, I thought the father had treated his father well, but the so. ( his fathers grandson) had not shown him the same respect.

    Like

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