neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/fridayfictionforaspiringwriters/150wordstory/thestone/06/12/2016

FFfAW Challenge-Week of December 6, 2016

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92nd Challenge

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Week of 12-06 through 12-12-2016

THE STONE HAS FLOWN

By Neel Anil Panicker

The man turned around and spoke to the  group of  wide eyed tourists,  his voice, a rich baritone oozing oodles of authority that seamlessly blended with the richness of the domed structure, well known in international artsy circles as the ‘House of  Jewels’.

“Presenting the  famed  Prince Jalhousse  Diamond.”

Two pairs of hawkish eyes swooped down on a hexagonal green stone from which emanated a shimmering radiance whose sheer brilliance seemed to light up  not just the enclosure but also the four corners of the cavernous hall.

“At a price tag of $ 1 million per carat, this ten carat  jewel is the costliest green diamond in the entire world.”

Bob whispered into Albert’s ears.

 ‘It will be ours by tomorrow.’

‘You must be mad. Seen the security here?’

‘I have a plan.’

As the two slipped out and disappeared into the streets of Paris, Albert allowed himself the luxury of a smile.

His friend had a hundred per cent success rate.

(c)neelanilpanicker2016#fiction#150wordshortstory

Word count: 169 words

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18 thoughts on “neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/fridayfictionforaspiringwriters/150wordstory/thestone/06/12/2016

  1. I wonder what the plan could be. Intriguing.

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    1. Me too. Thank you Angie for the appreciation.

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  2. Excellent prelude piece, would love to read the action scene the following day when the return for the heist. Nice take.

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    1. Yes, sure will do that shortly.
      Thanks for the appreciation.

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  3. Great take on the prompt. Not sure how I feel about the phrase, ‘ oozing oodles of authority.’ Somehow oodles and authority don’t mesh in my mind. But great anyway.

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    1. Just that it means someone is spilling or shall I say bursting with authority.
      Thanks for the appreciation.

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  4. LOL! I believe they are going to steal that precious green diamond! Great story, Neel!

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    1. Looks like that. Thanks for the appreciation.

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  5. Mike

    There is always a risk and a turning point. Leave it be that is my advise🙂 But if not, please let us have a follow up on how they managed it.😉

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    1. Thanks Mike. Please wait and watch.

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  6. Good one Neel you like to work with guy who operates at 100% success rate…

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    1. That’s true. Thanks Michael

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  7. That must be a pretty excellent plan! But then, if he has a 100% success rate, maybe he can pull it off. (Unless that’s 100% of one attempt, in which case maybe let him rack up some more attempts ha ha!)

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    1. That is true, Joy. Thanks for the appreciation.

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  8. Great story. I love the build up and the descriptions.

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    1. Thank you so much for the appreciation.

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  9. Oh wow, what a way to pique a reader’s interest! I wonder what his foolproof plan will be?

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    1. That was so nice of you. Thanks for the appreciation. As far as his plans are concerned, I am as clueless as anynody else is.

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