neelwrites/fiction/Sunday Photo Fiction – November 6th2016/08/11/2016

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NOT JUST A STONE

By Neel Anil Panicker

The afternoon sun tore into her skin, knifing through the half torn saree that she was wearing. It  slashed into her bare boned frail limbs, mercilessly burning to cinders whatever remained of her frail self.

Careful not to bump into the post afternoon office crowd of harried men and women in suits that looked like they all came from the same Bond Street tailoring house, the woman scanned the place in a circular arc much like an over anxious squirrel looking for the nearest hole to lodge herself into.

She spotted it just before her eyes dulled. What was that? A stool? A bench? The old woman inched herself closer, squinted her cataract-wasted single eye, and saw for what it was: a half broken slab. Her heart filled up with a ray of hope and summoning all her strength, she inched ahead and slumped onto the stone.

Across the street, the imposing all white sandstone Victorian facade of Standard Chartered Bank intercontinental building looked down at her.

As if on cue, her right hand slipped inside her pale grey cotton blouse.

Cold fingers cupped hard metal_ a Glock .45 caliber handgun.  Annette, the international killer, was ready for her quarry.

Word count: 200

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The idea of Sunday Photo Fiction is to create a story / poem or something using around about 200 words with the photo as a guide. Please try to keep it as close to the 200 words as possible. It doesn’t have to be centre stage in the story, I have seen some where the placement is so subtle, the writer states where it is.

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12 thoughts on “neelwrites/fiction/Sunday Photo Fiction – November 6th2016/08/11/2016

  1. An unlikely assassin. The perfect sort, who no one would suspect.

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    1. Thanks Steve for stopping by and reading my work. Yes, that’s the reason for the character build up. Known would ever think an assassin in such a disguise would come.

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    2. Thank you a zillion for your kind and highly invigorating words, Steve.

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  2. Wasn’t expecting that ending! Very well done.

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    1. Thank you a lot for the appreciation.

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  3. A thriller – brilliant 🙂

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    1. That so nice. I am humbled by your appreciation.

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  4. Excellent. I don’t think her victim will suspect her, and I don’t think anyone else would either. It’s a great story.

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  5. mandibelle16

    Nice ending you really didn’t expect Annette was a killer, just some worn out old woman. Maybe she’s both?

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    1. Could be. I have now to take this forward. Give her story another twist. Thank you for the appreciation.

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  6. Yikes! Stay in the bank!!!!

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