neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/100wordstory/fridayfictioneers/on route/02/11/2016

Jean Hays

…on route

By Neel Anil Panicker


Fill it, shut it, forget it. That’s me. Just another trading post. Yeah! if that’s any consolation, they gave me a number as well, just a number though.

In the trade i am known as route 66.

Check that__on route.  That’s me. The median, never the end. They partake of my pleasures__rest, feast, and proceed.

My pleasures are temporary; their sights more permanent.

I am just a cog in the wheels. Some say imoprtant; but I know that’s just being polite.

I may feed their wheels but the truth is I am just a stopover meal, a part of the deal, but never the full deal.



Blue Ceiling FF

22 thoughts on “neelwrites/fiction/shortstory/100wordstory/fridayfictioneers/on route/02/11/2016

    1. Thanks. Thought I should speak in a different voice. Glad you liked it.


  1. Clever piece, Neel, an interesting analogy of how many of us feel about our lives at times.

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    1. Thanks Cear, glad you liked it. Am huge fan of your writings, by the way.


  2. Dear Neel,

    Now that’s a street’s eye view. Interesting perspective. Nicely done.




  3. Thanks Rochelle. Yes, i wanted to write this from a distance. Glad you liked it.


  4. great use of metaphor. well done.


    1. Thank you, glad you liked it.

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  5. Your roadside store really feels depressed, doesn’t it?


    1. Yes, looks like. But the, that’s life at times. I will try and do a fun piece some time soon. Have a nice day.


  6. Interesting perspective. I get the sense this narrator would have a lot more to say if we listened. I wonder if there are any treasured moments amidst the neglected feelings?


    1. Thanks. I too feel the same. Maybe if someone just sat down, shated a cup of tea or coffee, he would open up about his life and reveal some priceless moments.


  7. I enjoyed the unique way you took your story. Clever … well done.
    Isadora 😎


  8. I love the rhythm in this piece. “Fill it, shut it, forget it” “rest, feast, and proceed”
    Well done!


    1. Thanks Alicia, I thought I wanted to convey the insipid, spartan atmospherics of the place and the feelings of the narrator. Glad you appreciated it.


  9. michael1148humphris

    Hey Route 66 your a great story teller.🙂

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  10. I like the stand-aside perspective here. Nicely done.


    1. Thank you a zillion. Am so glad for stopping by and reading my story. I thought i would play around with a different POV. I am glad you appreciated my effort. Have a nice day.

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